Great start Kohen. I like how you thought of the different emotions you could have gone through if you had got lost in Auckland. Maybe next time you could use more imagination and pretend that it was a different world? Maybe you got on the wrong plane or found a whole new world on the other side of the door?
Hi my name is casey and i go to Mangonui School. Maybe next time you could make the words in the witting a bit bigger it is hard to read. With the title you could make the 2 first letters capitals
Great start Kohen. I like how you thought of the different emotions you could have gone through if you had got lost in Auckland. Maybe next time you could use more imagination and pretend that it was a different world? Maybe you got on the wrong plane or found a whole new world on the other side of the door?
ReplyDeleteHi my name is casey and i go to Mangonui School.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you could make the words in the witting a bit bigger it is hard to read.
With the title you could make the 2 first letters capitals
why do you want me to make bigger
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